Public transport could be made free of
charge. Are there some advantages or disadvantage to this charge?
In recent times, public means of
transport have attracted the general public attention. While some people claim
that there are many benefits gained from the trend that the government should
free of charge for public transportation, there are also many people who firmly
believe that its disadvantages should not be ignored. After through
consideration for my part, its cons could never over shadow its pros. This
essay will elaborate both benefits and drawbacks of this trend.
On the one hand, there are several
benefits gained from the trend that when people travel by public means of
transport, they should be free. Firstly, as we know, today, the society is
becoming more and more modern. In almost big cities, people always suffer from traffic
congestion at rush hours. Thus, it is necessary for them to go to by public
transport. It can be understood that means of transport such as train, bus…play
as important role in reducing this problems. Moreover, using public transport
often waste more time than traveling by own vehicles. People have a tendency to
like going everywhere by their means of transport. Importantly, traffic
infrastructure as well as public vehicles make traffic participants feel
uncomfortable, exhausted, even scare… because they are often dirty and dense.
Evidently, if people have conditions, they will choose their own vehicles. So
from my point of views, the government should not charge public transport which
encourage their inhabitants to travel by communal transport. Especially, this
leads to reduce environmental pollutants.
On the other hand, on top of the
important advantages of this part, its disadvantages should not be
underestimated. At first, when all communal means of transport are fee, where
to pay for employees? They also need money to looking after their family as
well as themselves. Obviously, this problem put pressure on the government. But
they have to invest a huge number of time and money in solving a lot of things.
They cannot afford to pay a large amount of money for this. And they will have
trouble in dealing with many issues. Evenly, the can be easily buried in debts.
In addition , because of free, many people tend to be not responsible for
presering vehicles which they travel by.
All in all, from that has been discussed
above, there are both benefits and drawbacks of this trend. Its disadvantages
should be well taken into account. Furthermore, governments should take
advantage of pros and minimize the cons this trend.
Comments
Tạo vocabulary cho keywords
Public transport= communal transport= public transportations = public
means/vehicles of transport/transportation
Made free
of charge= be free = be at no cost= be at no charge= without payment= no fares
charged/required
(cùng nét
nghĩa: sufficient revenue, pay salary, needed funds)
Free public
transport=
Governments= the
government|central|national|governmental
administration|authorities|leaders|officials
Introduction
1.
In
recent times, public means of transport have attracted the general public
attention.
>> ko rõ ràng: cần nói rõ “free”
thì mới “attract the attention”, chỉ “means of transport” chưa đủ “attract”
>> câu 1 nên paraphrase lại topic
>> Gợi ý: In recent times, allowing
public means of transport free of
charge have attracted the general public attention.
2.
While
some people claim that there are many benefits gained from the
trend that the government should
free of charge for public transportation, there are also many people who
firmly believe that its
disadvantages should not be ignored.
>> rườm rà vì dùng 2 lần “there
are”, 2 lần mệnh đề “that”, “some people” mệnh đề 1 không tương đồng với “there
are” mệnh đề 2.
>> Gợi ý ” While many benefits can
be gained from this trend/policy, some people firmly believe that its
disadvantages should not be ignored.”
3.
After
through consideration for my part,
its cons could never over shadow its
pros.
>>
thorough/careful consideration, không dùng “never” hay “always” trong viết,
“its” không rõ ràng, cần nhắc lại “free transportation”
>> Gợi ý: After my thorough consideration, the pros of free
communal transportation outweigh the cons.
4.
This
essay will elaborate both benefits and drawbacks of this trend
>> lặp lại “this”, không rõ ràng
“this trend” vì đây đang câu 4, trong khi “trend” e ghi ở câu 2. “this” hay
“its” chỉ link với câu liền kề ngay trước (câu 3) chứ không link cách 1 câu.
>> Gợi ý: In the following
paragraphs, I will elaborate on my point of views.
Introduction:
In recent times, allowing public means
of transport free of charge have
attracted the general public attention. While many benefits can be gained from
this trend/policy, some people firmly believe that its disadvantages should not
be ignored. From my perspective, the pros of free communal transportation
outweigh the cons.
Câu 1: paraphrase
Câu 2-3: đưa ra quan điểm
Body
1
On the one hand, there are several
benefits gained from the trend that when people travel by public means of
transport, they should be free.
>> lặp từ gain, lặp từ “trend”, câu trúc câu rườm rà (hạn chế dùng to-be)
>>
gợi ý: receive/obtain/gain/attain
People=
individuals= travelers= =commuters=movers= citizens
>> On the one hand, travelling by
pubic means of transportation at no charge is attractive for several reasons.
Firstly, as we know, today, the society
is becoming more and more modern. In almost big cities, people always suffer from traffic congestion
at rush hours. Thus, it is necessary for them to go to by public transport. It
can be understood that means of transport such as train, bus…play as important role in reducing
this problems.
>> không dùng “always” và “never”
trong academic writing, nên dùng “frequently”
>> không dùng “…” trong academic,
sửa lại thành “such as trains and
buses”
>> nên kết hợp tạo thành 2 câu
ghép/câu phức chứ không để thành 4 câu đơn
>> nên câu 1 trả lời trực tiếp
benefits
>> Firstly, in almost big cities,
people frequently suffer from traffic congestion at rush hours due to a large
number of personal vehicles occupying the road space. When making means of
transport such as trains and buses free, travelers tend to be use these mode of
transportation instead of their own vehicles, which reduce the traffic density
and make the travel time shorter.
Moreover, using public transport often
waste more time than traveling by own vehicles. People have a tendency to like
going everywhere by their means of transport. Importantly, traffic
infrastructure as well as public vehicles make traffic participants feel
uncomfortable, exhausted, even scare… because they are often dirty and dense. Evidently,
if people have conditions, they will choose their own vehicles. So from my
point of views, the government should not charge public transport which
encourage their inhabitants to travel by communal transport. Especially, this
leads to reduce environmental
pollutants.
>> e đang nói về benefits, không
nên đề cập drawbacks ở đây
>> reduce= lessen= diminish= lower
>> Gợi ý:
Moreover, free public transport can
benefit the environment. When eliminating fares, more and more people are
encouraged to commute by buses and trains instead of driving their own cars,
leading a lower level of pollution/
environmental pollutants from exhaust emissions and creating cleaner atmosphere
to dwell in.
Body
2:
On the other hand, on top of the
important advantages of this part, its disadvantages should not be
underestimated.
>> hơi rườm rà, “this part” không
rõ ràng
Gợi ý:
On the other hand, in my opinion, the
disadvantages of free public transportation should not be underestimated.
At first, when all communal means of
transport are fee, where to pay for
employees?
>> không dùng “at first” trong
academic, dùng “first/firstly”
>> không dùng câu hỏi trong
academic
They also need money to looking after
their family as well as themselves. Obviously, this problem put pressure on the
government. But they have to invest a huge number of time and money in solving
a lot of things. They cannot afford to pay a large amount of money for this.
And they will have trouble in dealing with many issues. Evenly, the can be easily
buried in debts. In addition, because of free, many people tend to be not
responsible for presering vehicles which they travel by.
>> cần 1 example nào đó cho bài viết
>> Gợi ý
The first reason is that the government
is unable to generate enough fund|sufficient revenue, which is used not only to
pay salaries for bus drivers but also to maintain the transportation infrastructure.
In addition, making public transportation at no cost could gradually lead to a
lower service quality because of improper attitudes of various commuters. For
example, some travelers conversing/communicating loudly with each other in the
buses can cause annoyance for others.
Conclusion
All in all, from that has been discussed
above, there are both benefits and drawbacks of this trend. Its disadvantages
should be well taken into account. Furthermore, governments should take
advantage of pros and minimize the cons this trend.
>> In conclusion, from reasons
mentioned above, I am of the opinion that there are more advantages than
disadvantages to free public transport.
Revised
essays
In
recent times, allowing public means of transport free of charge have attracted the general public attention. While
many benefits can be gained from this trend/policy, some people firmly believe
that its disadvantages should not be ignored. From my perspective, the pros of
free communal transportation outweigh the cons.
On the one hand, travelling by pubic
means of transportation at no charge is attractive for several reasons.
Firstly, in almost big cities, people frequently suffer from traffic congestion
at rush hours due to a large number of personal vehicles occupying the road
space. By making means of transport such as trains and buses free, travelers
tend to be use these mode of transportation instead of their own vehicles,
which reduce the traffic density and make the travel time shorter. Moreover, free public transport can benefit
the environment. When eliminating fares, more and more people are encouraged to
commute by buses and trains instead of driving their own cars, leading a lower
level of pollution/ environmental
pollutants from exhaust emissions and creating cleaner atmosphere to dwell
in.
On the other hand, in my opinion, the
disadvantages of free public transportation should not be underestimated. The
first reason is that the government is unable to generate enough
fund|sufficient revenue, which is used not only to pay salaries for bus drivers
but also to maintain the transportation infrastructure. In addition, making
public transportation at no cost could gradually lead to a lower service
quality because of improper attitudes of various commuters. For example, some
travelers conversing/communicating loudly with each other in the buses can
cause annoyance for others.
In conclusion, from reasons mentioned
above, I am of the opinion that there are more advantages than disadvantages to
free public transport.
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